Mmg grammatically correct. But
1. In text citation hancur. Alignment hancur.
2. Takde inferences, findings/thoughts on the reference made.
3. Takde kesinambungan dlm penulisan.
4. Straight out facts only! Dont know the assignment context but kalau i jadi lctrr.. https://twitter.com/nabsaurus/status/1343938271210946569

[cont] the writings supposed to have our own personal idea regarding the matter.
5. He/she sooo damn rude when asking about the update. Haluuuu. Tanya la ‘ok tak assignment? Is there anyway i can improve? What r ur thoughts about my writing? Ok x?’

Thanks to dr rafidah for being the strict-est lectrr masa asasi. She was the first lctrr that assign us literature review assignment using APA citation. Taught us how to do it by rejecting every writing we made. Third draft baru ok